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chris_s_comments [2013/05/15 11:35]
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 Organization: ​ You have obviously worked on this page, and the organization reflects this. I think it is very clear, and very easy to follow. Your links are clear, and provide the information that they claim to possess. Organization: ​ You have obviously worked on this page, and the organization reflects this. I think it is very clear, and very easy to follow. Your links are clear, and provide the information that they claim to possess.
  
-Clarity: ​ I would look at the "lying and creativity"​ and "lying and improvisation"​ pages. I think there might be more that you could say, or perhaps present it more clearly. Right now, it's hard to read and the list of sources adds to the confusion. I understand it's a work in progress, but that's what I noticed at this point. I'm sure it will be fixed by the end of the term. I might include some of your own views and opinions in these sections as well. Since there isn't much research, maybe provide a hypothesis. I don't know what Professor Bradley thinks, but I think it could help. In addition, I would give the example of the +Clarity: ​ I would look at the "lying and creativity"​ and "lying and improvisation"​ pages. I think there might be more that you could say, or perhaps present it more clearly. Right now, it's hard to read and the list of sources adds to the confusion. I understand it's a work in progress, but that's what I noticed at this point. I'm sure it will be fixed by the end of the term. I might include some of your own views and opinions in these sections as well. Since there isn't much research, maybe provide a hypothesis. I don't know what Professor Bradley thinks, but I think it could help. In addition, I would go in depth with the example of the baboons. I think that this could tie directly into humans and their lies. Since we are both primates, this would give another solid example. I really liked your flower example. That was really cool to learn. I think you guys are doing a great job, you seem to be right on track! 
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 +Content: Your sources seem to help discuss your topic, and seem relevant. Like I said before, just look at your "lying and creativity"​ and "lying and improvisation"​ pages. Try to clarify what you have found and what you are trying to say. Add some pictures here and there.  
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 +P.S. Picture of Pinocchio? Best. Idea. Ever.