Hello Jes! It's Joe from Cog Sci. For the sake of completing the peer review assignment I'm going to try to make a few comments about your site. Here they are:

  • 1. First I like the overall structure you have for the wiki, and the introduction section gives a good overview of what your project is about.
  • 2. But as you no doubt know the other sections in the overall structure (except for III) have no content when you click on them.
  • 3. Also according to the assignment instructions for the outline part of the wiki project you are supposed to have at least 5 sources which you think will be relevant to your project, but I did not see any sources posted on your site.
  • 4. Also I think it would be helpful to your readers if you could figure out a way to model (diagrammatically) the competing theories of emotions in cognitive science. This way your readers will really be clear on what the different ways of understanding emotions in cognitive science are.
  • 5. I think it would also be helpful if you made really clear the arguments and evidence that are thought to weigh for or against each competing model.
  • 6. I hope these comments were helpful, and if I overlooked something or suggested something where you already had it my apologies!

Hey I basically agree with Joe but I have a few comments of my own. emotions ethnographies and culture is a huge wall of text. some paragraph breaks or bullet points could do you well because otherwise the whole thing is hard to follow on the screen. as a matter of fact it might to better to break it up into three or more sub pages. something that helps me is keeping a window or a tab with the syntax page as I work and saving and previewing after every paragraph.

generic wikistuff

A wiki is different from other forms of paper. its nonlinear its a network instead. In a paper every complete idea gets a paragraph in a wiki it gets a subheading like this one. Each nested subheading is an indication that while your topics are on the same subject or page in general they are separate concepts that deserve their own time and consideration but just as importantly it tells the computer this so you can link to specific subheadings.

how this applies

I really like what you did with your introductory section. It clearly signaled the use of jargon, it was approachable and informative and I liked that you had regress and proceed indicators at the bottom. These help shape the flow of your audience and lead on to the areas they might want to use while still retaining the basically linear form of a paper.

content critique

basically what Joe said except his point 4. pictures aren't nearly so necessary when you have clear delineation of subjects and topics and the format of the presentation is clear. Judging from your intro you know how its done, just use that on the other pages.

  • a little something extra I find it helps navigation if at the bottom of the page there's an option that takes you back to the parent page

like this Back to Emotions


Evan here. Joe and Ben's comments are right on. In particular, I would advise you to clarify your working definition of emotion as we discussed in class (i.e., emotional expression and inner emotional states) and make it clear what the theories you're discussing say about them, and add some general background on theories of emotion, so that you can establish a basis for your investigation. Great job so far!