From Fletcher Bates: It is certainly an interesting topic. The idea that learning to musically improvise can improve baseline cognition in a variety of fields seems related to the Mozart effect whereby listening to mozart was shown to increase spacial IQ. However those effects had a limited duration. Make sure to examine the effects of stimulation which can also increase IQ. Listening to a piece of music which creates enjoyment and energy and thereby boosts IQ is not the same thing as what you are proposing. Just a thought. Anyway, everything seems well structured and everything is where it needs to be. Keep it up!

From Max Mogavero: Your outline is well organized and coherent. I am curious about the effect of improvisation on cognition. You say that it improves cognition, which makes sense considering what we've learned in class, but I'd like to know how, and how that differs from normal learning. Also, and this isn't a real criticism, I don't understand what “Motorcycle diaries” are or what they have to do with this topic of music improvisation and education. Everything else looks great to me!

From Jacob “Ride th mtorcy” Bedroske (Ask Seth): This topic definitely makes me recollect the argument that, if one is listening to music, he/she becomes more productive and motivated. However, I've heard that there is a significant difference between listening to familiar versus unfamiliar music; the latter actually can decrease productivity. Perhaps there's some connection there? As said above, everything looks very clear, concise, and organized. A cool thing to do might be to footnote or make small comment links to your sources within your already-existing paragraphs (like this), and include urls if they are accessible online. That being said, it's pretty solid!

Feedback from Seth King-Gengler:
This is a really great page, guys! Everything is presented in a very well-organized, sequential manner. Everything fits in it's place, and it is easy to digest. Your clarity and explanation of your points of interest are on the right track; you may want to refer to some articles that you mention with links to the studies in a subscript simply to give us easy access to the entire study that you did so well summarizing.

The only thing I would suggest to your wiki is to possibly add a general “problem” within everyday interaction and life, and then use what you have to explain how improvisation actually “solves” these problems (instead of just arbitrality telling us how our life will just be better.. how/what will change?). I feel like this would give a little more interest and pull in your topic, especially since you already have great material to work with.

Other than this, the page looks great, so keep it up!

Feedback from Valerie Miller:

Good job with relating your topic to psychology. Overall, you could stand to proofread through the page for several typing errors. Here's some more specific feedback. For the section on Cognition, I didn't feel that the study was linked very well to improvisation (as you seem to suggest in the first paragraph of the section. It's about taking music or voice lessons with no mention of improvisation.


Feedback from Kelson Zbichorski:
Looks good so far. It looks well organizationally, you may want to make separate pages for topics if you get too much information on the main page. There are a few grammatical errors or awkward wordings that you may want to look over. I'm not sure how much information you have found or will be able to, but you may want to expand each section more. I'm not sure how much we're expected to cite sources, but it seemed like there were a couple things you should have cited but didn't. Also, maybe a general conclusion at the end would be good.