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feedback [2013/05/28 05:48]
vmiller
feedback [2013/05/28 12:40] (current)
kzbichorski
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 Good job with relating your topic to psychology. Overall, you could stand to proofread through the page for several typing errors. Here's some more specific feedback. For the section on Cognition, I didn't feel that the study was linked very well to improvisation (as you seem to suggest in the first paragraph of the section. It's about taking music or voice lessons with no mention of improvisation. Good job with relating your topic to psychology. Overall, you could stand to proofread through the page for several typing errors. Here's some more specific feedback. For the section on Cognition, I didn't feel that the study was linked very well to improvisation (as you seem to suggest in the first paragraph of the section. It's about taking music or voice lessons with no mention of improvisation.
  
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 +Feedback from Kelson Zbichorski:​\\
 +Looks good so far.  It looks well organizationally,​ you may want to make separate pages for topics if you get too much information on the main page.  There are a few grammatical errors or awkward wordings that you may want to look over.  I'm not sure how much information you have found or will be able to, but you may want to expand each section more.  I'm not sure how much we're expected to cite sources, but it seemed like there were a couple things you should have cited but didn'​t. ​ Also, maybe a general conclusion at the end would be good.