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joe_s_feedback [2010/05/08 04:36]
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-Hello everyone! Wow your wiki page looks great! I like the structure of the wiki and the content. It seems like you've covered all the bases. That said as I was reading through I noticed some grammatical errors in a few of the sentences. Here I point out the sentences and suggest changes.+Hello everyone! Wow your wiki page looks great! I like the structure of the wiki and the content. It seems like you've covered all the bases. That said as I was reading through I noticed some grammatical ​and spelling ​errors in a few of the sentences. Here I point out //some// of the erroneous ​sentences and suggest changes.
  
 1. The last sentence on the introduction page reads: "By simply studying the existence of synesthesia,​ the field of psychology and cognitive science gain a better understanding of the mystery of the human mind and perception." ​ 1. The last sentence on the introduction page reads: "By simply studying the existence of synesthesia,​ the field of psychology and cognitive science gain a better understanding of the mystery of the human mind and perception." ​
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 Once again subject verb agreement is being violated here. You need to change "​is"​ to "​are"​ and you need to change take out the "​a"​ in "a general guidelines."​ Once again subject verb agreement is being violated here. You need to change "​is"​ to "​are"​ and you need to change take out the "​a"​ in "a general guidelines."​
  
-6. On the "Cross Activation Theory"​ page in the section titled, "​Synaesthesia and Creativity," ​on reads: "Found these statistics through “experimental measures of creativity” & surveys that found synaesthetes more commonly to be fine arts students. ​+6. On the "Cross Activation Theory"​ page in the section titled, "​Synaesthesia and Creativity," ​one reads: "Found these statistics through “experimental measures of creativity” & surveys that found synaesthetes more commonly to be fine arts students. ​
  
-??? +???This is not a complete sentence...do you mean something like: "These statistics were found through experimental..." ​
  
-7. You get the idea. Edit your pages along grammatical lines and you site will be even better than it already is!+7. You get the idea. Edit your pages along grammatical lines and you site will be even better than it already is! Great work!